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Cat ([personal profile] hermiones) wrote2008-05-28 03:01 am

Suju Fic: "Map Reading" (Siwon/Heechul, Kangin/Eeteuk)

Title: Map Reading
Pairing: Siwon/Heechul, Eeteuk/Kangin
Rating: R
Summary: One Hour Suju Fic Challenge on the subject: celebration; catch: no one knows what they're celebrating!
Warnings: Frottage, blowjob, rude language.






When Siwon returns to the apartment, Heechul's there alone. He's standing in the middle of the living area, his foot in one hand, trying to get his sock off. From the doorway, Siwon can hear Hankyung's voice. They're always so loud, on the 'phone.

“What?” Heechul is saying. “What, hang on. What news? You can't leave me hanging, bastard, tell me your news!”

Siwon carefully sets down his bag, folds him arms at the mess strewn about everywhere. There's magazines he doesn't feel he should look at, all over the floor. Hankyung's news, he thinks, should be that he's found a nice Chinese maid to look after the apartment. Siwon's in the middle of considering whether that's at all racist when Heechul swears.

“Fuck, his signal's gone!” he says. “He has news! I'll never know his news!”

“He'll be home in an hour,” Siwon reasons. “You'll hear about it then.”

“Yeah, well, I won't be the first to know, then,” Heechul retorts.

“So?” Siwon says. He's busy admiring the way Heechul's shirt pulls up around the hipbone, not really concentrating on Hankyung's news or lack of news.

“So,” Heechul intones. “What's the point in knowing something if you don't know it first? I can't torment Kangin with it if he finds out first.”

“Why would he find out first? You're not making any sense.” It's hardly an irregular occurrence, but Siwon does his best to keep up.

“He and Eeteuk are meeting him at the airport,” Heechul replies, flopping down onto the sofa with a long-suffering sigh. “Nobody tells me anything. Nobody loves me.”

“Your cat loves you,” Siwon says, after a while.

“Thanks,” Heechul says. “That makes me feel so much better.”



“Look, Teukie, I'm not saying you're a shit navigator, but-”

“The map is the right way up this time! I swear, it's the right way up!”

“Yeah, I see, that's great, but you're not reading it properly – you're reading downwards instead of upwards. See, we're...nowhere near the airport.”

“Scenic route?” Eeteuk suggests, as Kangin turns the car around. Kangin taps his thumb on the wheel and checks his 'phone again, while they're stationary.

“Are you sure he didn't give you a clue?” he says. “Anything at all?”

“Not before he was cut off,” Eeteuk says. “He said we were celebrating tonight. That was it.”

“Crap,” Kangin says. “That could be anything. Wait, drive through. I need a burger.”

Eeteuk sits, patiently, as Kangin orders and ponders the mysteries of the known universe over mustard and overcooked beef. He steals the onion rings when Kangin's not looking, and Kangin pretends not to notice. It's all very peaceful, until:

“Maybe he's gotten married,” Eeteuk says. “Maybe he'll come back with his new wife.”

“Don't say that,” Kangin says, around burger. “Fuck. I mean, happy for him and everything, but...fuck.”

“Yeah,” Eeteuk says. “Or maybe he's got a pet! A dog or something. I'd like a dog.”

“I think you have to put dogs in quarantine,” Kangin says. “I dunno, ring Heechul and ask what they do with him when he goes on holiday.”

Eeteuk hits him. Then, he rings Heechul.



Heechul is slowly making his way into Siwon's lap. Siwon doesn't know it yet, or perhaps he does and he's just being polite, Heechul doesn't really care. Siwon seems to have forgotten about Hankyung and about the mystery news – his eyes, for once, aren't glued to the Bible, but glued to the line of Heechul's fingers around the buttons on his shirt.

“Anybody could come home,” he says, it comes out a whisper. His eyes dart from his chest to Heechul's face. Heechul can't stand how hot it is when Siwon looks at him, all clandestine and vaguely afraid. There's something to be said for rooting a six foot man to the floor with how much he wants you. Something to be said for the way Siwon's hands shake when he's trying not to think about Heechul at all.

“Nobody's going to come home,” Heechul says. “Nobody's due back for ages.”

“Well,” Siwon says. “I think it's rude to disrespect the living area like this, it's communal, and-”

“Last night,” Heechul says, sliding across the sofa and kicking a leg over Siwon's thighs. “Everybody sat in here and watched porn together, like dirty boys. Do you know that they do that? It's already unclean. I'm just saying, we could add a little bit of-”

“I can't believe you all did that,” Siwon says. He's now worried about where he's sitting. “I'm so glad I don't live here.”

“If you did live here, we could do this more often,” Heechul says.

“Like I said,” Siwon says. “It's good that I don't live here.”

“Prude,” Heechul says.

“Slut,” Siwon retorts, with a hint of a smile. It makes Heechul stiffen against him, half with shock, half with arousal. He swats Siwon hard on the arm, and then wriggles comfortable in his lap for good measure.

“Oh,” he says. “Now you don't have a choice. You have to get me off.”

“Excuse me,” Siwon says. “I'm a good Catholic boy. I don't do things like that.”

“Take the night off,” Heechul says. “And put your hand in my pants.”

“No,” Siwon says. “You're the devil in the desert, and I'm-”

“Alright, alright,” Heechul says, digging for Siwon's hand and nudging it past his waistband. “There's moments when your biblical analogies are hot and moments where I feel like I'm in Sunday school. Shut up and get me off.”

“I never learnt this in Sunday school,” Siwon says, but his grip is tight and his palm compliant.

“You should,” Heechul says, eyes lidding. “It'd improve your conversion rate no end.”



“No answer,” Eeteuk says. “He's probably dancing with his cat again.”

“So,” Kangin says. “I heard you all watched porn last night.”

Eeteuk at least has the decency to blush as he looks out of the window. “No,” he lies. “No, I don't know anything about that.”

“You're the worst liar in the world,” Kangin says. “You should've invited me.”

“It'd be weird, us watching porn together,” Eeteuk says.

“Why?”

“I dunno,” Eeteuk says, thinking. “The last time we watched porn together, you were drunk and horny and you tried to hump my leg.”

“Did I?” Kangin asks, before dissolving into a guffaw. “Fuck, I'm sorry. I don't remember.”

“Well,” Eeteuk says. “Like I said. Weird.”

“It's not my fault,” Kangin says. “You look like a girl.”

Eeteuk gives him a look, and Kangin knows it's time to shut up.



Heechul's trying to multi-task. He doesn't like it, but in certain circumstances (mostly sexual) it's a must. Unless you like being selfish, which generally Heechul does but not in certain circumstances (mostly sexual). Only, it's difficult to grind down with your ass and move up with your hips, and he growls in frustration with the concentration of it, when really he's so damn close and all he wants is to come without trying to wriggle in the way Siwon really, really likes.

“Fuck's sake,” he says, shifting about and undoing the belt and fly on Siwon's jeans until the metal is pressing against his stomach. Siwon makes a hoarse noise as he digs his hand in, desperate for contact, still pushing his cock into Siwon's limp hand.

“Fucking don't stop,” he gasps, stroking Siwon far too hard, far too fast, but needy, but essential, and the moment Siwon tightens up again he cries out, comes on his hand. Far too fast, but needy and essential. It takes him minutes to recover, the dim light coming back to him, the husky shape of objects around him. Siwon's face: amused but taut, horny, irritated. He's stopped halfway through, something Heechul does a lot because he comes really annoyingly fast.

“Sorry,” he says, “sorry, look-” He's about to set in again, about to spur his tingling hand back into some sort of motion, when Siwon abruptly shifts him onto the floor.

“Oh, come on”, he moans, rubbing his hands on his thighs. “I didn't mean to, I-”

Only Siwon isn't moving away, isn't going off in the huff, he's...staying where he is and looking at Heechul with that infuriatingly fixed expression.

“What?” Heechul says, folding his arms. “What? What is it?”

Siwon raises one eyebrow.

Heechul sticks out his tongue.

Slowly, Siwon reaches for his cock with one hand and the back of Heechul's skull with the other.

“Oh, no, you don't-” Heechul says, but the words are swallowed as Siwon moves him down and he takes it, glorious to be wanted, glorious to be demanded, glorious glorious glorious.

He digs his nails into Siwon's thigh, just to prove a point.



“He's not answering,” Eeteuk says.

“Look, I didn't mean to call you a girl,” Kangin says. “Or say you looked like a girl. Which did I do?”

“You said I looked like a girl,” Eeteuk says.

“I didn't mean to. I was joking. I always call you a girl.”

“Yeah,” Eeteuk says. “I know you do.”

“Does it piss you off?”

“No,” Eeteuk says. “I just wish you didn't see me that way.”

“What way?” Kangin says. “God, are you reading the map wrong again? I don't know where the hell we are. Fuck, I think we're even further away than when we started-”

Eeteuk winds down the car window and throws the map out. It bounces away towards the side of the road, and falls down into a ditch. Kangin follows its journey with his jaw falling open.

“What did you do that for?” he cries. “Teukie, we're completely lost and I-”

“I'm not lost,” Eeteuk says. “You're lost. Follow the road signs. Follow the signs, Kangin.”

“You're always lost!” Kangin says. “You can't read a map to save your life!”

“I'm not talking about the road,” Eeteuk retorts. “I'm talking about. It's a metaphor, Kangin. Where you talk about one thing but mean another.”

“Oh, God,” Kangin says. “This ended in tears last time.”

“I just wish you could see me differently,” Eeteuk says.

“At the moment I'm seeing you as the guy who just threw the damn map out of the window!”

“Least I'm a guy now,” Eeteuk says. “That's an improvement.”

“Shit,” Kangin says. “We're 35 miles from the airport. Shit. Look, what is it? What's the problem? Can we do this in a language I speak?”

“In Kangin-speak,” Eeteuk says. “I wish you wanted to hump my leg because I'm Eeteuk. Not because I look like a girl.”

“Why do you want me to hump your leg?” Kangin says. “I mean, it's pretty far down on most people's aspirations list.”

“I don't know,” Eeteuk says. “I just really do. Because you're Kangin. I just want you to.”

Kangin drives for a while, until the signs start reading 22 miles to go, then 12, then 6. At 4, he speaks.

“Why didn't you tell me that before?”

Eeteuk shrugs. “You think I look like a girl.”

“I think you look like Eeteuk,” Kangin says. “Hot. Maybe a bit like a girl. But mostly just Eeteuk. If you want me to hump you, just ask. That's what friends are for.”

“I don't think that's what friends are-”

“It's a metaphor, Teukie, God, keep up.”

When he stops at the lights, he looks over at Eeteuk, who looks out of the window. The curve of his smile spreads around his face, just to where Kangin can see it. Incomprehensibly beautiful.

“Come back to my place,” Kangin says.



Heechul's 'phone is ringing. He's trying to reach out and pick it up, but Siwon slams his free hand down on top of Heechul's. The other is tied up in Heechul's hair, so Heechul doesn't risk a fight. Siwon's head is back and his eyes are tight shut and he's breathing through his nostrils the way he always does when he's just, almost there. Heechul flattens his tongue out and hums angrily in his throat, until Siwon's fingers tighten.

“Hey,”

Siwon's answering his 'phone. He's answering. His goddamn. Phone.

“No,” he says, a little shakily. “Not sure where Heechul is, sorry. I'll tell him you rang, okay?”

Heechul bares a little edge of teeth, until Siwon jumps.

“Hankyung's news?” Siwon looks down at Heechul, whose eyes are bright and dark. “No, I haven't heard. I haven't – oh, I've got to-”

The 'phone cuts out as its dropped, as Siwon's hand wrenches in Heechul's hair and he feels the back of Heechul's throat, just there. He yells, loud with surprise.

“Fuck,” he breathes, after a few minutes. Heechul is lapping clean, like a cat. “I hate it when you do that, you smug-”

“You were asking for it,” Heechul says. “I had to do something. You love it. Anyway, who was on the 'phone?”

“Eeteuk,” Siwon says, breathlessly. His limbs feel boneless. He can't even be bothered to tidy himself up.

“What did he say?” Heechul says, climbing back onto the sofa and leaning in, as if hearing some enormous secret.

“Nothing,” Siwon says. “He doesn't know anything. They're off to Kangin's flat.”

“Oh,” Heechul says. “I thought they were picking him up?”

“Oh,” Siwon says. “Oh, shit.”



When Kangin falls through the door, Eeteuk follows. He's dropped his 'phone in the stairwell, but he supposes that Siwon will survive. He sounded strange, anyway, kind of tired or choked or something. Eeteuk puts it out of his mind.

When Kangin falls down onto the bed, Eeteuk follows, tugging his shirt over his head.

“I'm sure we've forgotten something,” Kangin is saying, helping with his jeans.

“Yeah,” Eeteuk says. “To do this years ago.”

“Oh,” Kangin says, with a wolfish grin. “Yeah, that sounds about right.”




“So,” Hankyung is saying, to the businessman next to him in the airport bar, the one who looks suspiciously like he wishes he hadn't sat down. “You want to hear my news, right?”

“Um,” the man says, looking around him. “Well, I really should be-”

“It's good,” Hankyung says. “Honestly. You'll want to celebrate with me afterwards.”

“Well, okay,” the man says. “I suppose I can spare a few moments-”

“Well,” Hankyung says. “The truth is-”

[identity profile] amadomaybe.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
DUDE. This is FRICKING AWESOME. The Kangteuk storyline is just so a;sdlkfjs;j worthy. I could totally see it playing out in my mind. Especially:


“I don't know,” Eeteuk says. “I just really do. Because you're Kangin. I just want you to.”

Kangin drives for a while, until the signs start reading 22 miles to go, then 12, then 6. At 4, he speaks.

“Why didn't you tell me that before?”


It just seemed really real. Plus- Shichul smut=yessssss. XDDD

poor hankyung

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you! :D I love writing those two in cars, for some reason. It just seems like it suits them, hah. I'm so glad you liked it! ♥

[identity profile] puppycadet.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 02:24 am (UTC)(link)
WHAT IS HANKYUNG'S NEWS? ;ALSKDJ

“Why do you want me to hump your leg?” Kangin says. “I mean, it's pretty far down on most people's aspirations list.”

Um. ILU. And I love this and ♥

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:08 pm (UTC)(link)
AHAHAHA I HAVE NO IDEA. Seriously. I kept hoping I'd have one by the end of the hour but I didn't, hence the teasing. XD

Hahaha, thank you very much! Oh Kangin, you fail. XD ♥

[identity profile] phasera.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 02:24 am (UTC)(link)
OH MY GOD I LOVE IT TO DEATH.

THIS LINE IS GOLD:

“I never learnt this in Sunday school,” Siwon says, but his grip is tight and his palm compliant.

“You should,” Heechul says, eyes lidding. “It'd improve your conversion rate no end.”


*DIES DIES*

and the kangteuk was adorably awkward and perfect! ;o;

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:09 pm (UTC)(link)
THANK YOU. :) So much. ♥ I love writing dirty, dirty Siwon/Heechul. I can't help it, it's like a compulsion. XD

I'm thrilled you liked the Kangin/Eeteuk, too -- I sometimes get nervous about writing it. ♥

[identity profile] peacock.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 03:18 am (UTC)(link)
OKAY THIS IS GOING TO BE INCOHERENT

fhaosirhagishrpigah

asirfoiHAOIFHASORHGASIRG
ASRGOJOG
DTGBDG
RR

WQRGQWRGQWR

YOU

THIS

LOVE

YES

COHERENCE LATER

SPAZZING NOW

Heechul can't stand how hot it is when Siwon looks at him, all clandestine and vaguely afraid. There's something to be said for rooting a six foot man to the floor with how much he wants you.

THIS OH FUCK YES EXACTLY HOW I SEE HIM OH GOD

HOTTEST PART EVER

WANT

HEECHUL SCRATCHING NGGHGAKHDGR

FROTTAGEY FLOOR SEX

SUNDAY SCHOOL SRGHSAKGSPIRG ILU

KANGIN BEING FAIL

EETEUK BEING HOT

KANGIN STILL BEING FAIL

EETEUK BEING OBSCENE

SKGKHSAKGRHGIHARIGHSAPIRG

ALSO CLIFFHANGER NO FAIR

WHAT WAS HANNIE'S NEWS?

BUT I LOVE THIS HOW DO YOU WRITE THIS IN AN HOUR DAMMIT

*breathes*

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:10 pm (UTC)(link)
AHAHAHAHAHAHA. Sorry, this cracked me up. Thank you. :)

Hankyung's news -- I DON'T ACTUALLY KNOW. DFHDRHTDH. I kept hoping I would by the end of the hour but I didn't. I fail at life. XD

[identity profile] oh-god-key.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 03:51 am (UTC)(link)
It had to be you and your awesomeness. It's friggin' late here and I really should be sleeping, but I don't give a damn because.

Idek.

BUT you'll leave us hanging 'bout Hankyung's news!!!! THAT'S PLAIN MEAN.

[identity profile] oh-god-key.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 10:42 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, alright, I forgot to say something.

You write the BEST Kangin ever, I mean, your Kangin is PERFECT. I don't know how you do that, I don't even think he's your fav *I bet on Heechul, though~*, but when he's in 'your hands', he's... natural, true... I have never felt like this reading any other fic with him as one of the characters. I would read a fic featuring only him if you wrote it.

And the KangTeuk piece here is amazing. But I seriously thought Teukkie would reject him just like he did in that Kangchul, I'm sure you remember it.

I wanna be like you when I grow up xDD

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[identity profile] trolleys.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 03:52 am (UTC)(link)
AHHHH AMAZING. So many good lines! I particularly loved this: The curve of his smile spreads around his face, just to where Kangin can see it. Incomprehensibly beautiful. MWAH. KangTeuk is so often mishandled in fandom, but your take on them was believable and written with the right amount of sweetness and uneasiness. And your ShiChul? HOTTER THAN THE HOT HOT SUN. OH MY GOD PLS TO NEVER STOP WRITING THEM. ♥

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:13 pm (UTC)(link)
sergrgeghh thank you! I do think Kangteuk can be a bit over-fluffy at times, so I really am thrilled that you liked the way I wrote them here. I love writing boyish interaction (particularly in cars, apparently!), so, yeah. Thank you. :)

As for the Siwon/Heechul ahahahahaha it is like scratching an itch. Can't stop. Why so hot. *_*

[identity profile] ky-rin.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 04:37 am (UTC)(link)
;LKAJSD;LAKSJD;ALSDKJAS';DLKA'SD;ALKSD';SALKDAS';DLKASD HEECHUL PORN HEECHUL PORN HEECHUL PORN I LOVE YOUR USE OF THE WORD GLORIOUS AND SIWON SLAMMING HEECHUL'S HAND A;LSKDJA;LSKDJALSKDJ!!! *IMPLODES*

/spazz

“Well,” Hankyung says. “The truth is-”
Dear Cat, why are you such a tease? ;______;

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:14 pm (UTC)(link)
ergrsthrth :D :D :D Heechul plus porn, always a WINNER. :D

I am a tease because, um, being honest, I don't even know what the news was? :D? I kept hoping I'd know by the end of the hour, but I didn't. Ahahaha. Sorry! XD

[identity profile] ivy-snowe.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 07:22 am (UTC)(link)
alright, out of all these one-hour fics yours is the only one I've both commented on and mem'd, so that's saying something. This is so much delicious win, it's not even funny. Seriously, you wrote the guys so well, it's amazing. I love it.

“There's moments when your biblical analogies are hot and moments where I feel like I'm in Sunday school. Shut up and get me off.”

“I never learnt this in Sunday school,” Siwon says, but his grip is tight and his palm compliant.

“You should,” Heechul says, eyes lidding. “It'd improve your conversion rate no end.”


I read that and nodded like an idiot in agreement lol

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! ♥ Have you read the other fics, too? You're missing out, if not. :)

rtgrshh there's just something about those two and sacreligious dirty talk, I think. fsrhhr. *_* Thank you!

[identity profile] dream4fatgirl.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:20 pm (UTC)(link)
GLORIOUS GLORIOUS GLORIOUS!

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you thank you thank you!

[identity profile] dark-hunterjenn.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:23 pm (UTC)(link)
I love this! I don't want to go to work now, bad thoughts will not go over well there ;)

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Ahahahaha, naughty! XD Thank you very much for reviewing!

[identity profile] kuronology.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 12:40 pm (UTC)(link)
asdfghjklohmygod Shichul :DDDDD

When he stops at the lights, he looks over at Eeteuk, who looks out of the window. The curve of his smile spreads around his face, just to where Kangin can see it. Incomprehensibly beautiful.

“Come back to my place,” Kangin says.

... why is this so.... pretty? dhhhhhhhskfsjfjdsgfkjfglj

“Well,” Hankyung says. “The truth is-”
Oh, you tease

ilu♥

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:03 pm (UTC)(link)
:D I love it far too much. Seriously hot pairing. XD

Thank you very much! I'm teasing myself, really, I don't know what Hankyung's news was. I'm so glad you liked this, though. ♥

[identity profile] backdr0pjunkie.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 01:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, the KangTeuk was so pretty! I loved it!

KANGIN FAILS LOL. But at least it wasn't Eeteuk driving, as they would be insta-death'd.

And I loved Hankyung's accosting of a random passer-by. Poor Han, everyone is too busy having sexy time to listen to his news. 8D

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! ♥ Kangin is adorably fail, I really, really like him. But yeah, where driving is concerned, Eeteuk is more fail. I have a thing for car!Kangteuk. XD

I'm sure it'd be the story of his life, poor thing. He's so adorable. :D

[identity profile] halfkissed.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 02:03 pm (UTC)(link)
i loved the kangteuk in this one. which is a huge surprise coz i checked it out because of the shichul. lmbo. but seriously, this was awesome. and the end was just priceless. it's driving me a bit nuts, still, that i don't know what geng's secret is but... AWESOME nonetheless. hahah *mems*

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I can never decide which pairing I like most, hence...both. :D I'm really glad you enjoyed it, despite the teasing -- I don't know what Hankyung's secret is, either, so it makes two of us. XD

[identity profile] seungjea.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 02:40 pm (UTC)(link)
“No answer,” Eeteuk says. “He's probably dancing with his cat again.” --> somehow i can imagine this happening ^^

“Why do you want me to hump your leg?” Kangin says. “I mean, it's pretty far down on most people's aspirations list.” --> yeah! why would kangin would want to hump your leg if he could just screw you silly, teukie?

thank you for sharing!!

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:05 pm (UTC)(link)
Aahaha, you make an excellent point. ;) On both counts! I definitely think Heechul dances with his cat most of the time. XD

Thank you very much for reviewing!

[identity profile] avh8.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 03:53 pm (UTC)(link)
omg I think you broke me with the adorable KangTeuk there~~♥
"The curve of his smile spreads around his face, just to where Kangin can see it. Incomprehensibly beautiful." so beautiful! ^^

and oh the tease!! so cruel lolz~ I wanna know!
you're amazing I have to say please write more KT I love how you portray them

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you! Your icon is so cute, omg. I am weak to Eeteuk plus pom poms. :)

I wish I knew what Hankyung's secret is! XD Failure, total failure, haha. I do intend to write more KT fic, definitely -- they're my favourite boys. Thank you very much! ♥

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[identity profile] xaoiholic.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 03:57 pm (UTC)(link)
“I just wish you could see me differently,” Eeteuk says.

“At the moment I'm seeing you as the guy who just threw the damn map out of the window!”


WHY IS YOUR KANGTEUK SO MUCH WIN? GLORIOUS, MUCH?


“I'm sure we've forgotten something,” Kangin is saying, helping with his jeans.

IT'S OKAY KANGIN, IT'S JUST HANKYUNG YOU'RE FORGETTING. BUT DON'T WORRY, HE'LL BE TELLING THE NEWS TO THAT ONE RANDOM GUY AT THE BAR. SO NO HARD FEELINGS, 'KAY?


“Well,” Hankyung says. “The truth is-”

ONE DAY, WE'LL WANT TO CELEBRATE WITH HIM, I'M SURE.


Needless to say that I loved this, right?

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. :D Kangin is total fail, I felt sorry for Hankyung. It seemed so him, to be pestering random people in airport, ahaha.

Thank you very much for reviewing!

[identity profile] snaphouse.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 05:44 pm (UTC)(link)
the kangteuk was the cutest thing ever! rivalled only by

“Your cat loves you,” Siwon says, after a while.
this line. <3
adding to memories for sure!

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :) I love writing slightly wry Siwon, I think it's the thought of what his eyebrows would do. XD

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[identity profile] tsukikipin.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 09:14 pm (UTC)(link)
But what was Hannie's news?? XDDDDD The ending was hilarious.

KangTeuk totally deserted him when they were only four miles away. XDDD

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Ahahaha, God, I wish I knew! XD Man, total failure.

Kangin's a total failboat, I swear. Well, Eeteuk too, but Teukie's cute so I forgive him. XD

Thank you for reviewing!

[identity profile] sugarwarrior.livejournal.com 2008-05-28 10:00 pm (UTC)(link)
AAAAAHHHHHHHHH THIS IS AWESOME LOL.
LOVE THE KANGTEUK FIGHT ABOUT THE GIRL XDDDD;;; [They haven't had sex together before? o_o;; Shame on you XP]

And and the HanKyung thing. I WANT TO KNOW THE HANKYUNG THING LMFAO.
[is this a one-shot or continued? XDD]

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Heh, thank you very much! Yeah, they've failed in...consummating anything, oh boys. :)

Me too, haha! Nah, it's a one-shot -- maybe if I find out his news, I'll make another post. /shot

Thank you for reviewing!

[identity profile] kaylasj1019.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:35 am (UTC)(link)
PURE EFFIN WIN.

I literally laughed out loud reading the conversation between KangTeuk, especially the leg-humping part.


I'd quote my favorite lines, but the comment would probably restate the entire fic.

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Hahaha, thank you so much! :) I really love writing dialogue, so it's great to know it works for you. ♥

[identity profile] this-is-cd.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 09:08 am (UTC)(link)
I JUST.

JUST

OMG

YOU KNOW I LOVE YOU BUT SRSLY JUST

THIS IS SO AMAZINGLY FABULOUS AND OMG. lksdfjlaskdalskdjfalskdfjalskjfalkefjaewrftioajoiajertfal;tferlters;tsj;
asdflkja;slfje;rfajer;fjaftieojtoa;ejrtj

I just don't know what to do with myself after this ITS SO GREAT GOD.l lskdfjsldkfjsldkfj

POOR HAN. lskjfdlskdjflskdjf POOR POOR FORGOTTEN LEFT AT THE AIRPORT HAN!!!!!

WHATS HIS NEWS OMG.

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:13 pm (UTC)(link)
AHAHAHA. Thank you so much. :D :D :D

I am just mean to Hankyung. He's so CUTE and I just. I see it happening to him. ergsergr.

He won't tell me what his news is. I still have no idea. I HAVE FAILED. XD

[identity profile] sthlmsyndrom.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 12:44 pm (UTC)(link)
I loved this! Poor Hankyng, deserted at the airport! The kangteuk storyline was awsome, I loved their dialoge, and they were in a car!(I have a strange love for car!kangteuk ♥)
And this sentense was made of win!
“In Kangin-speak,” Eeteuk says. “I wish you wanted to hump my leg because I'm Eeteuk. Not because I look like a girl.”

[identity profile] burritos.livejournal.com 2008-05-29 01:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, thank you! I too have a strange love for car!Kangteuk -- I think it's partly because of that video where Eeteuk totally fails at driving. They're so cute together.

Thank you for reviewing! :)
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[personal profile] fishpatrol 2008-05-30 04:39 am (UTC)(link)
;AJDFSL;KKLLJ SO AWESOME♥ The dialogue is brilliant and the porn is hawt -- what more can you ask for, right? :D Please tell me you're considering continuing this? *hopes*
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[personal profile] padfoot 2008-05-31 11:47 am (UTC)(link)
:D Thank you so much! ♥ I might well continue it, if Hankyung ever tells me what his news is. ;D

[identity profile] beevosteethos.livejournal.com 2008-05-30 07:18 pm (UTC)(link)
OMG, this was perfect... and you wrote it in ONE HOUR! *explodes*

I love your Siwon/Heechul, I love all the jokes and the hot and your dialogue is fantastic. I LOVE Kangteuk. I love Eeteuk speaking in metaphors and throwing away the map, and Kangin being so totally baffled by everything.

Hankyung being left at the airport, telling his news (THE NEWS) to some poor, unsuspecting stranger is absolute gold.

I really loved this, you absolutely killed me with it, as always, but the fact that you wrote this in one hour - damn. Just...Awesome! ♥♥♥♥♥♥
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[personal profile] padfoot 2008-05-31 11:48 am (UTC)(link)
:D Thank you so much for your detailed review! I had a lot of fun writing this, especially the bits you picked out on, so reading this was really great. :D ♥

[identity profile] mikkyboom.livejournal.com 2008-06-05 07:48 am (UTC)(link)
ahahaha, everything about this fic was amazing and you wrote it in an HOUR?
i can't even get DRESSED in an hour.
and omfgg, poor hannie telling his news to some random businessman and being forgotten. >.

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