The first section, with the telephone interaction between Atobe and Oshitari was the best, mostly because your Oshitari is perfect and witty and sensual in the best of ways. Though “Hello thirty year olds,” Oshitari says. “From the twenty-something.” was my personal favourite line. The way you've written Oshitari's humour is just ace.

I could gush more about it, but I won't. Suffice it to say, thank you so much for sharing this!